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Organizational Spr2006 Sess39

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Returned Term paper drafts. The term paper is due on Friday.

Most of the draft feedback was fairly standard. Here are the primary issues I noticed by number:
1. Poorly constructed introduction. The introduction of any paper should introduce the subject matter of the paper in general terms and describe why it matters before narrowing in to a thesis. For this paper, your group presentation provides a logical starting point.
2. No thesis. What is this paper about. If I can't tell at the end of the introduction (usually the first paragraph), there is a problem. The worst variant of this problem is that you don't know.
3. Poorly constructed argument(s). Each major point of your paper should be capable of standing more or less on its own in support of your papers thesis.
4. No clear distinction between arguments. It looks like the paper just sort of grew without any clear sense of where it was going or how you were going to get there. Outlining the arguments in your paper can help with this.
5. Overlong paragraphs. When a paragraph starts to approach being a full page long, its good to consider how to break it in two.
6. Minimal conclusion. You cannot reasonably conclude a paper in one to three sentences. The conclusion is where you recap your paper and drive its importance home to the reader.
7. Poorly constructed conclusion. Conclusions should usually begin by reviewing the thesis. They should usually proceed to review the arguments, consider the value of the paper for the reader, and consider any implications that follow from having done the work.
8. Where to from here? How would you develop this paper further? This should be in the conclusion.
9. No references.
10. Insufficient References (expected 6 to 10 at minimum).
11. Non-APA references
12. No citations
13. Non-APA citations

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Ethics
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- Honesty/truth
- Single value ethics of all sorts
We'll continue a bit on Ethics next time

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